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Posted by Kelly on May 10, 19102 at 14:12:27:

I am new in the writing field and this is the first thing that I have wrote. Give me some feed back, please.

You have been hurt
Lied to, cheated on
I know the pain you go through

My heart was black and cold
I wanted no one
But you are more than I deserve

Your heart aches with deceit
You mind struggles to decide
Should you trust me?
Should you believe in me?
Should you love me?

I have been where you are
Turned my emotions off
To protect myself
Now you are in my life
Showing me how to love again

My heart ached with deceit
My mind struggled to decide
Should I trust you?
Should I believe in you?
Should I love you?

You want to love me
But you are not over her
It will take time for you to heal
From your open wounds

Your heart will heal
Your mind will calm
I do trust you, believe in you
I do love you
I will wait for you



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